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OMG my first critique. Okay here goes nothing.

I really like how you described usher. He is a very complex character. I also like the scene it's just perfect for the scenario. You also let me picture the scene in my head it was wonderful and your words fitted the story completely. I have always loved your stories but this one is by far the best. It's so mysterious how usher loves and hates her at the same time. I so will tell everyone i know to read this.It's such a touching story. keep up the good work and i hope you enjoy this first critique.
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DarkLight-The-Hybrid Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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